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Post by Rosestar on Nov 25, 2010 17:26:12 GMT -5
Here we go.
Prolouge
A yowl split the air in the the night time sky. Cloudshade awoke at the thumping outside. She sniffed the air. MOONCLAN. Cloudshade sprang from her moss bed and peered out of the den. There were dozens of cats outside from the 2 clans, Moonclan and Iceclan. Cloudshade heard a voice speaking. " My Clan is prepared to fight for all the land", said a gruff voice. It was Sharpstar, leader of Moonclan. " Sharpstar, you're crazy. "It's leafbare and you're going to start a battle?!", said Heatstar, the leader of Iceclan. " If you won't surrender, then we'll fight. " You have enough land after you drove out EarthClan", screeched Heatstar. " That was then and we've trained long and hard so I can rule the Forest",yelled Sharpstar gleefully. " Now, Moonclan ATTACK!". The cries of battle surrounded Cloudshade. With a yowl, she leapt into the battle. She ran into a dusky brown tom. The name Mudwillow flashed through her mind. She crashed into Mudwillow taking him by surprise. She unsheathed her claws and slashed at him. Mudwillow ducked under and leapt at her belly and flipped her over. Not a bad move, thought Cloudshade. She turned around and got to her feet, but Mudwillow was no where to be seen. She scanned the clearing. Her friend, Shadowstream was fighting off a huge tom named Redbelly. Then she saw it. About 10 warriors were piled on top of Heatstar." NO, Heatstar!", yelled Cloudshade. "Cloudshade, goodbye, Cloudshade. " NO!!!!!!!!!". But she never saw the strike that fell her neck. She yelped in pain and then fell into the darkness. The last thing she heard was her son, Jaybreeze lamenting over his dead mother.
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 25, 2010 17:38:42 GMT -5
Some things I should mention.
1. Heatstar was supposed to be Cloudshade's brother. 2. Her mate is revealed later. 3. This is about Cloudshade's life. 4. The prolouge is how she died. The rest of the story is from her birth to whatever. 5. I know this isn't all that good. Believe me.
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 26, 2010 11:31:49 GMT -5
Alliegances from Chapters 1-6
Iceclan Leader - Snowstar - Big, white tom with little gray splotches. Deputy - Heatfire - Dark ginger tom Apprentice - Honeypaw Medicine Cat - Hollowwind - Black gray she cat Apprentice - Redpaw Warriors -
Thornheart - Golden brown tom Willowflight - Gray she cat with whitte freckles Apprentice - Freezepaw Addertooth - Dark brown tabby tom Mallowwatcher - Pure white she cat Apprentice - Littlepaw Rockpelt - Dusky brown tom Stonefang - Light brown tabby tom with black stripes on his back Reedstream - Blue gray tom Birdheart - Black she cat with green eyes Volejaw - Light ginger tom with blue eyes Hailfall - Dark Blue gray tom Apprentices -
Littlepaw - Pure black tom Freezepaw - White tom with black freckles Redpaw - a dark red tom Honeypaw - ginger she cat with green eyes
Queens - Shineheart- Cram colored she cat with blue eyes Mother to Thornheart's kits, Cloudkit, Mistykit, and Nightkit
Lilycloud - Light ginger she cat with ice blue eyes Mother to Reedstream's kits, Firekit and Sleetkit
Elders - Grasspetal - Cream colored she cat Mumblewhisper - Dark brown tabby tom with amber eyes
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 26, 2010 13:40:42 GMT -5
Alliegances Moonclan
Leader - Silverstar - Silver she cat Deputy - Sharpfang - Dark brown tabby tom with green eyes Medicine cat - Barkfoot - Light brown tom with a white throat
Warriors - Ferntail - Pale gray she-cat Icefoot - Snowy white she-cat Sneezebreeze - dark black she-cat with amber eyes Shallowfeather - Tall, muscular, black tomcat Apprentice - Crushpaw Toadheart - Black and white tom Turqouisetail - Tortoiseshell she-cat Apprentice - Shinepaw Moorwind - Fast, black and gray tom with white underbelly Rushsplash - Dark blue gray she-cat with amber eyes Apprentice - Mudpaw Blazemist - Light ginger tom with a scar on his shoulder
Apprentices - Mudpaw - Golden brown tabby tom Crushpaw - Lean reddish - brown tom Shinepaw - Golden brown she-cat with green eyes
Queens - Featherstorm - Mother to Shallowfeather's kits, Hornkit and Breezekit
Elders - None as of now
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Post by Hawkstar on Nov 26, 2010 17:47:15 GMT -5
Where are EarthClans allegiances?
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 26, 2010 17:58:36 GMT -5
They got deleted, but this time, it was my fault.
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 26, 2010 18:13:18 GMT -5
Alliegances Earthclan
Leader - Cavestar - Dark brown tabby tom Deputy - Mapleshadow - Dark black she-cat Medicine Cat - Pebbleclaw - Dark gray tabby tom ( Apprentice - Ashflame) Warriors - Pinkfur - Reddish - orange she-cat Meteorblaze - Craterfall Runningflight Jaggedthorn Brightshine Greenpetal Blazestep Jadewillow
Apprentices -
Ashflame Dawnpaw Phoenixpaw Applepaw
Queens - Russetshade - Dark ginger she cat Mother of Jaggedthorn's kits, Lightningkit and Tinykit
Elders - Stickleaf
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 26, 2010 20:27:11 GMT -5
Chapter 1
"Cloudkit"!! " Wake up"! Cloudkit awoke to the sound of her mother's voice. She lifted her head sleepily. Her mother purred. " Good"! Cloudkit looked at her littermates. They were playing aroung in the bramble bush. She sighed. " Mother, why should I go outside?", she complained. Her mother licked her paws and spread them across Cloudkit's whiskers. " You don't need to, but at least you should go to the ceremony tonight". " What ceremony?". "The new deputy ceremony", her mother replied. " Oh". ***
Cloudkit was sitting at her mother's paws with her siblings Mistykit and Nightkit. She looked up at the stars. Then she heard her leader, Snowstar's voice rising above all the other cats. " The time has come to appoint a new deputy" " So, I say these words before Starclan may they here and approve my choice". " HEATFIRE will be the new deputy of Iceclan", finished Snowstar. "Heatfire, Heatfire", cried out the cats. Cloudkit looked up at Heatfire. He was a huge dark ginger tom with powerful shoulders rippling with strength. Cloudkit turned away and saw a golden brown tom coming towards her. It was her father, Thornheart. " Hello, Cloudkit, Mistykit, and Nightkit", said Thornheart with a smile. "Hello, Father", chorused the 3 kits. He looked at her mate and smiled again. "Well, best be off, Heatfire's probably looking for cats to join a patrol". He ran off. As her mother shooed her away, she looked back. Clan life. Not bad. Not bad at all", she thought.
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 26, 2010 20:51:08 GMT -5
Okay, i've got a question. How do you bold and italisize things?
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Post by Hawkstar on Nov 26, 2010 20:52:39 GMT -5
Okay, just press modify post and then highlight the part you want to bold and press the b or i special button. Then just press modify post.
Also, Rosestorm, so people don't spam up these threads with our stories in them, I made comment thread for both of our stories, for people who read our stories.
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 27, 2010 14:38:41 GMT -5
Cool, a comment thread. I'll be there.
Chapter 2
Cloudkit looked around. This wasn't the Rock cave. It was a huge meadow. then a voice came out from the blue. " Hello, Cloudkit", said the cheerful voice. She looked around and saw the cat. It was a huge dark gray tabby tom with powerful shoulders. He looked straight at her and smiled. " So, Cloudkit, what's up?", he said. "Who are you?", asked Cloudkit who was making sure her voice didn't tremble. " My name is Blazemist", he murmured, " Don't worry, You're dreaming". She relaxed. That was it. She was just dreaming everything. She looked at Blazemist. Blazemist seemed to guess what she was thinking. " I am real and I am here to tell you that you're on the wrong side". "On the wrong side of what?", asked Cloudkit. " I mean your with the wrong clan. Moonclan is where you should be", he said. "What", Cloudkit screeched. " Moonclan can give you power, food, anything", started Blazemist. But Cloudkit wasn't listening. " NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!". " Hey, stop!", yelled Blazemist. Then suddenly Blazemist stiffened. " Gotta go, kit, don't tell anyone about me, kay?". Before Cloudkit could reply, he vanished into the darkness. **********************************************
Cloudkit awoke. What a vivid dream, she thought. "Hey,Cloudkit", said Mistykit. "Let's play a game". " What game?", she asked. " It's called Secret Kits". Suddenly, she was interested. " How do you play?". "Well, we gotta sneak out of camp and explore the world", replied Mistykit. Mistykit lead the kits out of the nursery, but ran into 3 more kits. It was Cloudkit's brother Nightkit and her friends Sleetkit and Firekit. " Where are you going?", they asked. " Nowhere", they replied. They walked away. Once they were out of earshot, Mistykit whispered into her ears." Why do you act so moony in front of Firekit?", she asked. " I do not!", Cloudkit retorted. " Whatever". Her sister knew nothing. If only she could tell her about the dream......
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 27, 2010 14:58:37 GMT -5
Notes
1. Blazemist is alive, but he has a powerful secret 2. There might be a forbidden relationship 3. Moonclan is recruting 4. Cloudkit, Phoenixpaw, and Hornkit all have a point of view in the story.
5. Firekit and Sleetkit are 5 1/2 moons old and Cloudkit, Mistykit, and Nightkit are 5 moons old.
6. Snowstar dies in Chapter 4
7. The story goes Cloudkit POV, Cloudkit's POV, then Hornkit's POV, Hornkit's POV, then Phoenixpaw's POV, and Phoenixpaw's POV.
8. Phoenixpaw may have a name change
9. For Hawkfeather, I need help finding a new name for Cloudshade's Adventures.
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 27, 2010 15:13:12 GMT -5
Sneak Peek of the rest of the book.
Dark times approach as Cloudshade, Hornscorch, and Flarefeather get ready for battle. Secrets that should have remained hidden are discovered, one cat's betrayal, and a powerful death. As Cloudshade unravels the past, romance blossoms within her and she is forced to decide whether saving the forest is as important as to the true power of love. Hornscorch finds something, something that can either save or destroy the clans. Flarefeather, well Flarefeather's got a story of his own. As peril draws closer, there remains only question unanswered. Is this the end?
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 27, 2010 16:43:40 GMT -5
Chapter 3
Hornkit
" Hornkit, come back here RIGHT NOW", screeched Featherstorm. She chased after Hornkit. Hornkit looked back. UH - OH, thought Hornkit, she might catch up to me. H elooked back again, but this time Featherstorm was nowhere to be seen. He laughed. " I win", he yelled. Just then, Featherstorm jumped out of a bush and caught Honkit by the scruff and dragged him to the base. " Tough luck", said Breezekit, Hornkit's brother. " I know",replied Hornkit. " I know" ***************** Later that night, Hornkit was having a weird dream. He was standing in the middle of a field. He looked around
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Post by Rosestar on Nov 27, 2010 21:35:53 GMT -5
Please delete these posts so you don't spam my threads.
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